Policy Paper Revisions

I hope that I wrote my paper properly, I am a little worried I didnt cover everything that I was supposed to or give enough information. I used my own beliefs and knowledge for most of it, because I am familiar with the topic.

Policy USC

The meal plan system here at USC is a little ridiculous, and it needs to be altered. Students get three meals a day, in certain time slots, each one varying in the price depending on the meal. If a poll were to be taken, almost every student would say that they go over the price USC has enstated for that meal. The register employees already ask "how are you paying?", "meal plan please", "and what extra?" "carolina cash". It is not because students order too much food and they go over, the meal plan price is just too low. I order a salad with chicken on it and a drink, and I go over. It all adds up. This needs to be altered.

Planning Essay 4

I looked at the chilhood obesity epidemic from four different perspectives: a world-wide view, an American view, a parents view, and the child themselves view. I think I will write a proposal paper so I can look for a better solution to this illness. I think that children in schools should be mandated to do at least an hour of physical activity each day, whether playing a sport or running around. Also that schools should eliminate foods higher than a certain caloric consumption from their meal plans, like cookies, chips, certain fried foods. Something that will be beneficial and effect children everyday. I think I have done a good amount of research, but if there is somehthing I feel I am missing when writing my paper I will of course go research it and find answers.

Revisions 11.15

I messed up with the whole peer evaluation part of the assignment. I didn't change anything in my paper because I didnt even look at my email until last night. Therefore I didnt send my peer his eval, which I thought I would give to him in class today. But anyway I read through my eval this morning and thought it was very helpful. When I go to revise my paper for my portfolio I will take his points into considersation because I think that it will benefit my paper. I think my facts are the strongest points of my paper because they really enhance the issue that I am discussing and why there needs to be change. I am a concerned with my analysis, because I quoted so many people, they discussed everything that I would say. I just didnt think I would be allowed to say it without citing someone, so I did. Maybe I will change that for my final essay.