Policy Paper Revisions

I hope that I wrote my paper properly, I am a little worried I didnt cover everything that I was supposed to or give enough information. I used my own beliefs and knowledge for most of it, because I am familiar with the topic.

Policy USC

The meal plan system here at USC is a little ridiculous, and it needs to be altered. Students get three meals a day, in certain time slots, each one varying in the price depending on the meal. If a poll were to be taken, almost every student would say that they go over the price USC has enstated for that meal. The register employees already ask "how are you paying?", "meal plan please", "and what extra?" "carolina cash". It is not because students order too much food and they go over, the meal plan price is just too low. I order a salad with chicken on it and a drink, and I go over. It all adds up. This needs to be altered.

Planning Essay 4

I looked at the chilhood obesity epidemic from four different perspectives: a world-wide view, an American view, a parents view, and the child themselves view. I think I will write a proposal paper so I can look for a better solution to this illness. I think that children in schools should be mandated to do at least an hour of physical activity each day, whether playing a sport or running around. Also that schools should eliminate foods higher than a certain caloric consumption from their meal plans, like cookies, chips, certain fried foods. Something that will be beneficial and effect children everyday. I think I have done a good amount of research, but if there is somehthing I feel I am missing when writing my paper I will of course go research it and find answers.

Revisions 11.15

I messed up with the whole peer evaluation part of the assignment. I didn't change anything in my paper because I didnt even look at my email until last night. Therefore I didnt send my peer his eval, which I thought I would give to him in class today. But anyway I read through my eval this morning and thought it was very helpful. When I go to revise my paper for my portfolio I will take his points into considersation because I think that it will benefit my paper. I think my facts are the strongest points of my paper because they really enhance the issue that I am discussing and why there needs to be change. I am a concerned with my analysis, because I quoted so many people, they discussed everything that I would say. I just didnt think I would be allowed to say it without citing someone, so I did. Maybe I will change that for my final essay.

SWA#19

1. Theres not exactly a stance that he takes, but he does say his opinion of what criteria define a sport. "It must be a large motor sport, it must have an objective scoring system, it must use nothing more complicated than a "simple machine", such as a baseball bat or vaulting pole". And that is what he qualifies as a sport, his personal opinion. Throughout the article he asks rhetorical questions and trys to get the reader to decipher the differences between certain "activities and sports" and how they are different or not.
2. It could be important to constitute whats a sport in events like World Games, the Olympics, and such. There are sports like figure skating that are in the Olympics, that have world games, but some people dont believe that it is a sport because it's so subjective. There are judges and theres no objective way to decide who wins, like scoring a goal or such.

SWA#18

Topic #1: Rising rate of childhood obesity
Topic #2: Crime on college campuses
Topic #3: World Hunger

It wasnt very difficult to find sources on childhood obesity. I used the USC libraries and found several books varying from a global view on childhood obesity to just an American perspective. I also found various health books which will supply me with factual information, statistics, and percentages.

For my second topic, crime on college campuses, I also used the USC libraries and found various books and articles to use. They talk about the different types of crime; violence, staulking, rape, stealing, drugs. I also found an article comparing crime on community colleges to four year degree colleges, which I thought was an interesting view point to look at.

Again, there were very many sources to look at for the topic of world hunger. Alot of articles advocating how to end world hunger, and how people can reach out to third world countries. But also books on how we have hungry people even in major countries, in poverty strircken areas. So there are diverse views on the topic that I can look at and collect information as a whole to form an argument.

Factory Food Artificially Cheap Response

Ethan Huff makes an effective argument about certain grown food products decreasing in price, and decreasing in quality. He makes the claim that prices of foods like meats and dairy have decreased because of cheaper production; animal factories. Instead of animals grazing hundreds of acres on family owned farms around America, they are now mostly cooped up in less than satisfactory animal factories. It is dirty, over crowded, and not maintained like it should be. Diseases and infections between animals are easily spread, so the owners inject the animals with antibiotics and hormones. This is turn effects the product and even the person consuming the product like in the article "Why Factory Farms Threaten Your Health". Huff also makes the claim that feces and animal waste run off from the factories goes into water supplies, effecting the environment. He claims, in his last paragraph, that the cure to this craziness is " ending cash crop subsidies and reverting back to an agricultural system that respects the land, encourages local farming and employs clean and natural methods of growing and raising foods. I think this argument is very successful in appealing to the audiences emotions and in factual information. If we all invested in and ate organic foods, we could send a message to the FDA and aid the small farms around America, while helping ourselves by eating healthier.